Comments on: March 15th News Media Release

By: Munkee_Boy

Munkee_Boy — Thu, 13 Mar 2008 00:01:14 +0000

@emerald > Cheers will be faxing it through to them today, this is more of an invite to the media to come along and give them the opportunity to inform the public prior to the event. Will keep that in mind for if and when we need to get something to them directly (which shouldn’t be too far off actually).

By: Emerald

Emerald — Wed, 12 Mar 2008 14:53:41 +0000

I have a friend who works for Today Tonight’s production dept. Let me know if you need anything, interviews set up that sort of thing and I’ll see what I can do. Can’t promise anything but I can definitely at least make enquiries.

By: Munkee_Boy

Munkee_Boy — Wed, 12 Mar 2008 05:00:17 +0000

Thanks all, I have updated this with all of your suggestions. The final version will now be sent. Good work Anon!

By: nanopope

nanopope — Wed, 12 Mar 2008 03:00:11 +0000

No need to capitalise Human Rights Abuses and Tax Exempt Status, these words carry plenty of power and weight without bending grammatical rules (yes, I’m a GN). Otherwise an excellent letter, clear and to the point. You can has several kudos and internetses.

By: Anonette

Anonette — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 22:54:31 +0000

I’d hyphenate “Adelaide-based Anonymous”. And put an “and” between “city” and “finishing” here: ‘…before marching on a loop around the city /and/ finishing up at the Church…’

Other than that, I think it’s fine. Succinct, but gets everything across. Good work.

By: Munkee_Boy

Munkee_Boy — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 14:55:53 +0000

Thankyou for your input. The version in this post has been updated with all of your ideas being implemented. Please re-read it and continue to help me fine tune it :)

By: AnonymousCoward

AnonymousCoward — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 13:09:29 +0000

I don’t like the fact the issue of tax is shown first and the human rights abuse is second.

Getting the tax exemption status removed is a major goal.. but we’re protesting against the churches illegal activities.

apart from that – I like it :)

By: anon1138

anon1138 — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 12:43:58 +0000

@AnonymouseSmith: opposed?

By: AnonymooseSmith

AnonymooseSmith — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 11:47:34 +0000

anon1138- the word ‘against’ should not be used at all, it is too lumpy.

By: anon1138

anon1138 — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 11:21:04 +0000

Protestors say that they are not against the beliefs of Scientologists but

Change to “Anonymous protestors are not against…